By | 17 February 2008

It's no use showing me poems about music;
I'm tone deaf.There's nothing wrong with that one,
just needs more brilliance.

Yeah, you've written a shocker there.

Great poem. And full of love.

*      Don't use tired images when you feel
you are at a crucial point.

Don't crowd the idea. Have confidence
the point is made and

ask yourself
has this poem got hungry pockets?

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