Comments on: Haikunaut Island Renga 1

By: Cordite

Cordite — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 11:28:25 +0000

Thank you everyone for your comments!

As Keiji mentioned, we're closing the comments section on this post now, as we're at the half way mark of the renga.

I'd like to encourage those readers who may be lurking or who might just be shy to have a go at submitting your ku in the second half.

The more the merrier, as they say!

David

By: lorin

lorin — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 10:40:35 +0000

… my 3rd go:

listening to pink floyd

still on the hit list

[Barbara]

a kiss, a sigh

not a cloud in the sky

and all that jazz

By: lorin

lorin — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 09:46:36 +0000

Hi Anne… …well, it really is only the surface of the earth, the earth of my tomato patch that was moving…but it gave me the idea.

Lots of really good and interesting connections in all of the ku being posted here!

lorin

By: lorin

lorin — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 09:40:12 +0000

Josh … if we can have cats in love, I reckon we can have snails in love, too.

Besides, it certainly LOOKS more like true love with snails

By: Sandra Simpson

Sandra Simpson — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 09:00:17 +0000

humming

an old song -

summer garden

and may I resubmit:

the first brush-stroke

completed

to the sound of thunder

By: josh wikoff

josh wikoff — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 07:12:41 +0000

snails in love…are you kidding!? wow! solid, lorin…

listening to Pink Floyd

still on the hit list /bt

slowly, quietly

the earth movesÄ¶

snails in love /lf

my story

your story

smiling mountain /jw

Keiji_san, where you at with side two? Shall we have a ku from you, as was requested, to lead us off?

By: Anne Elvey

Anne Elvey — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 05:35:50 +0000

Hi all,

Thank you Genevieve O for your comment on my eucalyptus ku …

Rhonda, the more I think about it the more I like your “down by the olive grove…” with its lovely reference to the brick in the wall and yellow brick road? It feels to me as though it is a ku to open things up, with the invitation to take to the road and consider.

I like your slow earth, snail love ku, Lorin. I have no idea whether using the word love again is a no-no. Keiji mentioned above that a renga needs several ku on love themes.

Fleur, your knapsack bridge is an interesting image. I like both your ku just posted.

By: Fleur

Fleur — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 05:12:54 +0000

I love Lorin's mosquito ku above,

and offer:

unscheduled

happy wanderers rock

the knapsack bridge

even strollers

skate on the ice lake

in Hopfensee

By: lorin

lorin — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 04:16:33 +0000

…another go:

listening to pink floyd

still on the hit list

[Barbara]

despite Aeroguard

IÄôm her chosen targetÄî

first mosquito

By: lorin

lorin — Mon, 30 Mar 2009 02:00:42 +0000

For me, there are many good linkings…ÄúTsukeÄôaiÄù. I also like Barbara's 'Pink Floyd' a lot, with it's play on 'hit list', which also relates to hippopotamus being on the poachers' hit lists. They shoot them and sell the teeth as ivory. Hippos are on the endangered species list these days. …this as well as the 'pink' linking to cherry blossom.

hey, Josh aloha, g'day from a sunny Autumn day in Melbourne. Love your two ku [I insist that one is about whales, though the ambiguity isn't lost on me]

Can you [or anyone] tell me if this one's valid, since you [Josh] have used 'love' already? I have my doubts, but don't know.

listening to pink floyd

still on the hit list

[Barbara]

slowly, quietly

the earth movesÄ¶

snails in love